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Many people from rural areas moving to the cities .what problems can this cause?what can be solutinos

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In the contemporary era, the rate of migration of commoners from rural
areas
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 to urban
areas
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 has rapidly increased. Undoubtedly,
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 phenomenon renders invitation to myriad issues but, some sensible solutions are
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 available to curb the grave concerns engendered by
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 process of migration.
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 essay will shed light on problems and will mention solutions as well. To commence with the problems caused by augment in the population of metropolitan cities. First and foremost is an overcrowded atmosphere which
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 leads to issues like housing crises, inflation, unemployment etcetera. Moving towards the worry of housing crises , as with augment in count of individuals in metropolitan cities the basic need of building homes as per the number of citizens is shunned by authorities which results in inflation.
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, owing to scarcity of buildings owners raise the amount of rent for rental units.To cite an example, in Canada, residents of the
city
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 of Toronto are paying
sky- rocketing
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 amounts of rent for single occupancy units as
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city
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 has become overcrowded
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 the facilities it provides to citizens.
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, authorities should present some solutions to
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 issue. Probing ahead to the measures that can be taken.
Government
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The government
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 should invest a hefty amount of wealth in countryside
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 in order to create facilities and job opportunities for citizens of rural
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.
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,owing to the fact that commoners are duped into moving to developed cities by representing the tall and fascinating buildings on televisions ,
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,
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 commercials should be disallowed. To exemplify, in India, individuals are lured by the standard of living of eminent celebrities residing in the
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 of Mumbai , and the common people regret moving to that
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.
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, an adequate amount of knowledge should be rendered to commoners. To recapitulate, as per the aforementioned notions it can be concluded that movement from urban to rural
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 gives an invitation to numerous problems ,
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, the government should take
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the initiative
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 to educate people in order to eradicate the grave issues.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban migration
  • infrastructure
  • urban sprawl
  • accommodation
  • degradation
  • public transportation
  • urban planning
  • remote work
  • cultural preservation
  • integration
  • assimilation
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