With growing populations in cities, more and more people live in homes with little or no outdoor space. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
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live
in
houses with little or no courtyard Correct article usage
apply
space
. Even Though,
a segment of society Remove the comma
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seeks
a
positive development, Change the article
a
however
, I will elucidate my opinions in the upsurging paragraphs.
First of all ,the Add the comma(s)
however,
people
who are with opine that having less or no outer space
is beneficial, states as now parks, playgrounds and gardens are found in every nook and corner of the cities
they find the outer space
at their houses is useless, as the people
living in the cities
believe that they have to work the whole week and they just have two relax on the weekends which they prefer to go for outing, friends gathering and many more.
Nevertheless
, having myriad benefits this
trend is a negative development earlier in the past people
used to have big courtyards with no boundary walls, those people
were emotionally connected with each other
. Nowadays, Change to a singular noun
other
people
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have
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each other. Rephrase
apply
Moreover
, having big outdoo
r Correct article usage
a big
space
have several advantages as small children can easi
ly play there under the surveillance of their parents without the fear of getting kidnapped. To vindicate- Correct the article-noun agreement
small children
a small child
according to
an article published in a national daily, over three-fourt
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the small chi
ldren are being kidnapped from the parks and gardens. Correct your spelling
three-fourths
Secondly
, having a bigger outdoor space
means a bigger parking space
as we do not have to quarrel regarding the parking space
like in the big cities
.
To conclude
,while
living in the city one must have enough outdoor space
so that he/she can sp
end quality time Correct word choice
so that
with
his/her loved ones in that place. Correct article usage
apply
this
not only makes one positive but also
provides mental peace.Submitted by naresh on
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