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Band 6.5

You are about to go on vocation for a month. A friend from another town will come and stay in your apartment. Write a letter to this friend. In you letter -explain where your friend can get the key to the apartment -give your friend some instructions about using your apartment -recommend some places to go

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Dear Sara, Hope you’re doing well. I’m so excited that you’re coming to stay
in
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at
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 my place and
looking
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look
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 after my cat,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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 I’m sad that I won’t be able to accompany you during
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 time. First of all, I’ll leave the keys with James, the
lobby-man
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, and you can collect them on your arrival from the reception of my building.
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 that, I’ll put the parking entrance card on
dining
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 table. The only thing that I am concerned about in the apartment is that in the heavy rainfalls, water comes into my room if I leave my balcony's door open so please make sure to lock that every time you use it. Since it’ll be your first trip to Istanbul, you should visit some historical sites like Ayasofiya Mosque and Dolmabahche Palace because these places are magical with all that authentic
architectures
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. Above that, you can use
M7
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 metro to get to the Belgrade Forest, where I’m sure you’ll be surprised by the beautiful nature and clean air. Anyway, I’ve to go back to work for now, keep in touch! Lots of love Tiara

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coherence and cohesion
Consider adding a brief introduction that clearly states the purpose of your letter. This can enhance the overall coherence of your message.
coherence and cohesion
Try to ensure each paragraph is focused and maintains a singular theme, particularly in the paragraph about the apartment's instructions.
task achievement
You might want to add a sentence or two about your cat, as this would provide context and make it more personal.
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The tone of your letter is warm and inviting, which is perfect for a friendly correspondence.
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The recommendation of places to visit is specific and provides your friend with helpful information.
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