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Many people go through life doing work that they hate or have no talent for. Why does this happen? What are the consequences of this situation? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Several people work without
vocation
 or passion in their
career
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careers
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 throughout their lives.
This
 is the result of parents forcing them to follow a
career
 path they don´t enjoy at all, resulting in workers who
lack
 motivation and
vocation
 for performing certain jobs. Parents play an important role in the
career
 choice of young adults, whether they approve or not of a profession is a key factor in the final decision when choosing a profession to
study
 for the future.
For example
, a
study
 in China shows that around 54% of highly skilled professionals, including doctors, engineers and others opted to
study
 their
career
as a consequence
 of their parent's approval of their decision.
Consequently
, sprouting a new generation of professionals lacking
vocation
 and ultimately, producing mediocre or average results in their respective areas. Including areas where there shouldn't be a
lack
 of
quality
 in the work, like
health
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 working areas where a mediocre
job
 could pose a threat
for
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to
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 someone's
well being
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. To put an example, one
study
 about
quality
 and control in different professions in the US, depicted a decrease in
quality
 work over the
last
 4 years, the
study
also
 surveyed that the reason why the
quality
 dropped significantly was attributed to a
lack
 of motivation
while
 performing the
job
. In conclusion, many workers
lack
vocation
 and passion
while
 performing their
job
, since their parents forced them to take a
career
 path they weren´t fond of.
As a result
,
quality
 has decreased independently of the type of
job
 they perform, including even
highly-skilled
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highly skilled
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 professionals .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dread
  • passion
  • inherent talent
  • fufilling
  • career
  • job
  • fulfilled
  • unhappy
  • unsatisfied
  • work-life balance
  • burnout
  • stress
  • depression
  • anxiety
  • self-esteem
  • emotional well-being
  • potential
  • achieve
  • success
  • personal growth
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