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The chart shows the sales of five different kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014

The chart shows the sales of five different kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014
#sales #five #kinds #jam
The above line graph
show
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shows
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 the
sales
 of five different kinds of jam
flavour
 from the
year
 2009 to 2014 . The line graph
show
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shows
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 the increase in strawberry , raspberry and grape
flavour
. It
also
 the decrease in cherry and plum
flavour
 .
The people
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People
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 have started to love the
flavour
grape
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of grape
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 , there
is
Wrong verb form
has been
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steady
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a steady
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increace
Correct your spelling
increase
form
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from
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 the
year
 2005 to 2014. The
strabery
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strawberry
flavour
have
Wrong verb form
had
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 the
most
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apply
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selling
flavour
 of jam from 2005 to 2014 , except in the
year
 2012
becase
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because
 raspberry
sales
was
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were
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 more compared to
straberry
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strawberry
 in that
year
. We could see the steady downfall of plum
flavour
,
its
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it
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 was
at
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in
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the
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apply
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third place in 2005 and
nowit
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now it
 has
became
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become
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 the least one in the
year
 2014. The cherry
flavour
 had ups and downs in its
sales
. it had its peak
selling
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sales
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 were in the
year
 2012 were it had
Correct article usage
an equal
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equal
Correct article usage
an equal
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 amount of
sales
 with grape
flavour
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, flavour, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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