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The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The following graph demonstrates the
number
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 of demands that have been received by the Tourist Information Office in a city, from January to
June
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 2011. As a whole, the trend of inquiries which have been done in person is rising steadily, and the summit of it
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 is in
June
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, the
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 of letters or emails was falling dramatically. The
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number
 of pleas by telephone had some fluctuations, but generally, its trend is climbing.
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 the data, the
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 of
people
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 who came, and asked their need face to face, was a bit more than 400 individuals,
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 it had a sharp rise in April, and more than 1200
people
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 used
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 method.
Finally
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, in
June
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, it reached its peak and about 2000
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 pleaded in person. Moving on to the letters, more than 600
people
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 sent emails in January, but the figures fell gradually during February and March. Suddenly in April, the
number
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 of letters decreased abruptly to less than 600. The telephone method began with a good amount, more than 800
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,
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 it rose inconsistently. The
number
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 of telephone calls stayed the same in April, but after that, it climbed noticeably and reached 1600
people
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 in
June
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, june, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • number of inquiries
  • Tourist Information Office
  • six-month period
  • increased steadily
  • reached a peak
  • decreased slightly
  • increased dramatically
  • experienced a gradual decline
  • general trend
  • highest number
  • lowest number
  • significant increase
  • tourism interest
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