What are the advantages and diadvantages of working remotely? What is the future of remote work? Include any relevant example from your own experience.

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Nowadays, thank to
advancement
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the advancement
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of technology, many
employees
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are able to
work
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in flexible location
instead
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of fixed positions. I believe
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trend is appropriate in contemporary society and I will reveal more
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perspective in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, working in remote areas makes enterprise owners
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to control their staff's discipline. To be more specific, when
employees
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work
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in their
home
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or some areas out of their offices they may no longer obey some company's policies
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as punctuality,
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and uniform
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abiding. Gradually, the enterprise's culture may be demolished and workers
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do not have
awareness
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the awareness
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to preserve the identity of their working places.
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, the relationship between colleagues
are
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also
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waned if they do not interact regularly and directly with each
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. As
the
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result, the productivity and solidary spirit of
companies
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may be affected seriously.
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, letting
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to
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do their
work
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in flexible location
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indicate some advantages for enterprises
especially
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, especially
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finance
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in finance
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and health matters. Illustration, being a lower number of
employees
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in the workplace can give
company's
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company
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owners a chance to rearrange working space from a large to a narrower one. By doing
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, the operation cost including rental or consumed energy
cost
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costs
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might
reduce
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significantly. At the same time, in
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apply
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modern life, the appearance of infectious diseases
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as Covid-19 can interrupt some commercial activities of
companies
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if some
employee
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employees
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are infected.
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, online working is a plausible method for
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situation. In conclusion, I personally think that remote
work
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is the modern trend in current times. Depending on
operating
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the operating
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type of individual
companies
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, managers can apply flexibility between online and direct
works
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work
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in order to optimize the benefits of their
companies
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.
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