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Some people enjoy change, while others like their lives to stay the same. Compare these two approaches to life and present your opinion.

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Some prefer to live as they have lived for decades,
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 others try to
change
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 their lives with changing times. Both
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approaches have their own pros and cons. Humans tend to resist
change
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initially
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 as risk factors creep in with trying new
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. Living without
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 and sticking to old habits gives us stability because we know what we will do next. Through
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 fixed approach, people can avoid lots of mistakes as there is no experimentation. Doing familiar
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 gives a comfort level and leads to success in its own way. Success needs constant hard work. If you instantly switch over to another thing, after facing a failure, it is definitely a lack of persistence in you and moves you away from striving for solutions.
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, some people prefer to experience different
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.
Change
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 is sometimes inevitable for success. It requires a person to have
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 and daring to take risks.
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 people have a great positive attitude. They look forward to seeking new excitements and meeting new challenges in
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 rapidly changing world.
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, they get more opportunities to succeed. They say, "No risk, no profit."
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, a farmer who adopts new technologies are bound to reap more in less time and with less effort than a farmer who sticks to old, traditional methods. New
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 simply bring new knowledge.
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 to
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 makes a person adventurous and lively. It increases one's thinking power and helps him to become rational. When nothing stays the same and everything around us is in constant progress, why shouldn't we
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? I believe
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 is inevitable to keep pace with changing times. Those who do not
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 are inflexible. They do not take chances and miss good opportunities which may never come again.
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Task Achievement
Ensure that all aspects of the prompt are addressed in your response. Make sure to clearly compare and present your opinion on the two approaches to life (staying the same and enjoying change).
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay displays a good level of coherence and cohesion. However, consider improving the introduction and conclusion by providing a concise summary and restating your opinion.
Lexical Resource
Your choice of vocabulary is appropriate and varied. Continue to use a range of vocabulary and idiomatic expressions to enhance your writing.
Grammatical Range
Your grammatical range is satisfactory, with only a few minor errors. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and the correct use of tenses.

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