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The plans below show how the ground floor of a particular building has changed over time.

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The figures below give the point of view about how the ground floor of a building changed
in
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over
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 several years.
Overall
, it is clearly seen that over three decades there were
thrice
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three
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 improvements
in
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 the ground floor, beginning with the
office
, apartment, and
lastly
 was
the
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flower shop.
To begin
 with, in the first period, which is from 1958 to 1984, the
office
 was
builded
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built
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 with 7 rooms inside consisting of a meeting room, assistant’s
office
, kitchen, secretary’s
office
,
manager
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manager's
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office
, toilet, and reception area.
Thus
, after more than two decades,
exactly
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in 1985, the company was replaced by an apartment with a smaller layout of space, with only 5 rooms maintained.
On the other hand
, after more than one decade passed, the apartment was destroyed. As a change, the flower shop was built in the same area, yet the room has just four ; kitchen,
office
, play area, and gift card room, given the wider space for flowers.
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Provide a more thorough analysis of the changes in the ground floor over time. Include specific details and additional supporting information.
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Improve the clarity and structure of your introduction and conclusion. Make sure they clearly introduce and summarize the main points of your essay.
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Expand your range of vocabulary to add more variety and depth to your descriptions. Use more specific and precise language to convey your ideas.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar to ensure your ideas are expressed clearly and accurately. Review the use of prepositions and verb tenses.

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