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The plans below show how the ground floor of a particular building has changed over time.

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The figures below give the point of view about how the ground floor of a building changed
in
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over
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 several years.
Overall
, it is clearly seen that over three decades there were
thrice
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three
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 improvements
in
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on
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 the ground floor, beginning with the
office
, apartment, and
lastly
 was
the
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flower shop.
To begin
 with, in the first period, which is from 1958 to 1984, the
office
 was
builded
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built
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 with 7 rooms inside consisting of a meeting room, assistant’s
office
, kitchen, secretary’s
office
,
manager
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manager's
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office
, toilet, and reception area.
Thus
, after more than two decades,
exactly
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in 1985, the company was replaced by an apartment with a smaller layout of space, with only 5 rooms maintained.
On the other hand
, after more than one decade passed, the apartment was destroyed. As a change, the flower shop was built in the same area, yet the room has just four ; kitchen,
office
, play area, and gift card room, given the wider space for flowers.
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Provide a more thorough analysis of the changes in the ground floor over time. Include specific details and additional supporting information.
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Improve the clarity and structure of your introduction and conclusion. Make sure they clearly introduce and summarize the main points of your essay.
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Expand your range of vocabulary to add more variety and depth to your descriptions. Use more specific and precise language to convey your ideas.
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Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar to ensure your ideas are expressed clearly and accurately. Review the use of prepositions and verb tenses.

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