The graph below gives information about the percentages of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below gives information about the percentages of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
The diagram provides data on
ratio
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the ratio
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of residents living in urban areas
for
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia. The chart includes information for the time period between 1970 and 2020
as well as
prediction
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a prediction
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of the trend till the year 2040.
Overall
the
percentage
of people living in cities has experienced a huge
raise
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rise
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between 1970 and 2020. The biggest
growth
comparing
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to
other
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the other
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three countries can be
spectated
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in Malaysia, which
percentage
started at approximately 30 and ended up being bigger than 80.
Moreover
, in each of these four
countries
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countries,
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there was a constant
growth
during
this
period. The only
counry
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country
that hasn't experienced constant
growth
was
Philippines
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the Philippines
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. Its
percentage
fell from a bit less than 50 to circa 40 between 1990 and 2010.
However
,
after
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this,
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the numbers raised back to approximately 45 percent.
According to
predictions, the upward trend will continue in the next 10 years.
However
, in
Thailand
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Thailand,
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the
percentage
is expected to grow at a more rapid pace than in
other
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the other
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three countries.
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lower tempo of
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growth
was predicted for Malaysia.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, growth with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • population
  • cities
  • Asian countries
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • changes over time
  • comparison
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • urbanization
  • developed countries
  • developing countries
  • rural areas
  • metropolitan areas
  • migration
  • industrialization
  • environmental impact
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