Many cities have vehicle-free day, which encourages citizens to take bus, cycle or take taxi to go out. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

The pollution
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around the world are increasing ,and a personal
car
is the main problem is why in the modern, many countries have issue
about
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the
envrionment
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environment
. I think is a very good idea that many
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should
to
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have
vehicle-free
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day
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because
this
activity can help us to save
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nature.
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explian
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explain
about the positive of using public transportation from my point of view.
To begin
with, the advantages of using public transportation, first of all, the number of private
car
owner are grow up ,and many
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around
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have been
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from cars, so if people drive a
car
everyday
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, people will live in a bad
envrionment
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environment
.
Secondly
, many countries have
the
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issue
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regarding
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traffic
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likes
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in my country in which every morning we have a problem
about
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many cars on the street.
Thus
, I think that if leader support and give policy about using
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train
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or others ,
this
action will
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advantage
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and
it
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can solve
this
problem.
On the other hand
, some think that
the
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personal
car
is more
confortable
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comfortable
then
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public transportation
such
as they need to
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for a long
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,but I think that
progarm
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the programme
is only one day that
why
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I think that every should
to
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do
this
project and the head must to support and
also
people can work out when they are biking or walking to the bus that mean
this
project will help them healthy.
To sum up
, I totally advantage
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this
program because I think that
this
is very valuable for
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, nature and the world not only
about
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the
envrionment
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environment
but in our
phycical
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physical
too.
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