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The line graph compares how much time it would take for three companies to manufacture a refrigerator in1990 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph compares how much time it would take for three companies to manufacture a refrigerator in1990 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates data regarding the
time
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 to produce one refrigerator from three different companies from 1990 to 2000. Generally speaking, the
overall
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 changes were average and constant downturn. First off, in 1990 the refrigerator producing
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 in
company
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B
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 was the least,
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 more
time
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 it took in
company
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 A and C respectively.
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, the production duration in
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B
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 faced a constant and steep decrease in the percentage of production line affected, a decline from 35h to 27h between 1980 and 2021.
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, it still costs the most
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 to produce a refrigerator.
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, the duration of
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 A surged from 30h to 22h. It is interesting to notice that the line of
company
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 A met the one in
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B
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 in 1995, and
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 it exceeded the refrigerator-producing efficiency in
company
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B
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.
On the other hand
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, the production
time
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 in
company
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B
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 faced a moderate decline in the rate of condition. Which is approximately a 5% reduction in the given temporal interval, reaching its bottom of 23h in 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, company, b, h with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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