The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The given diagram represents the process of manufacturing
sugar
from
sugar
cane.
Overall
, the formation takes around 7 steps
such
as growing, harvesting, crushing, purifying, evaporation, centrifugation, drying and cooling
for
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the
sugar
to be produced. It usually begins with
growth
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of the sugarcane and ends with drying and cooling the
sugar
.
Firstly
the
sugar
cane growth takes around 12-18 months which is
then
harvested either by the farmers or tractors. Followed by
this
the crushing of the
sugar
cane is done out of which the juice is extracted and purified under a limestone filter to remove the impurities. After the purification, the juice is heated under
a
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evaporator to remove excess water which makes it thick forming a
syrup like
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product.
Then
the
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centrifugation is done in which the
sugar
crystals are separated from the syrup, the crystals are
then
air dried and cooled in a container which leads to
formation
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the formation
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of
end
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the end
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product "
sugar
which is
then
packed and ready for distribution.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • sugar cane
  • harvesting
  • transporting
  • factory
  • crushing
  • extracting
  • juice
  • filtering
  • impurities
  • heating
  • evaporating
  • syrup
  • boiling
  • crystallizing
  • sugar
  • separating
  • drying
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • stage
  • process
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