Many people believe that they should spend money to enjoy life at present.others however, think they should save it for the future. Discuss both views and give your opinion
Life is to be enjoyed
everyday
. Some Replace the word
every day
people
believe that they should consume their fortunes presently, but others believe to invest
and enjoy it at a later time. Personally, I believe in the latter notion and will discuss the point of view of each belief system.
Change preposition
in investing
To begin
with, many people
choose to spend what they have now to buy whatever their heart's
Change noun form
heart
desire
. Correct subject-verb agreement
desires
For example
, after every pay cheque, people
spend it to pay off their needs and wants such
as mortgage
, car payments and maintenance, beauty products, eating in restaurants and shopping for new trends of clothes, bags, and accessories. Add an article
a mortgage
This
is a temporary hapiness
one can have. Correct your spelling
happiness
However
, we need to think that our body will not grow any younger, it will come to a point where people
will reach elderly years, and health and wealth will decline if not properly invested well.
On the other hand
, many of the population think that saving for the future is beneficial. For instance
, they believe that once they get old, they do not have the strength and capacity to work anymore, and that is
when they will use their resources to fund their everyday needs. Fortunately, this
is true for human nature. I believe that with wisdom and proper discipline of financial resources, one can be enjoy
their retirement years.
In conclusion, it is better to save portions of our hard-earned money for retirement year expenditures than foolishly consume Change the verb form
enjoy
them
our cash for present temporary feasting and enjoyment. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Although
,
we need to spend money now, we have to think Remove the comma
apply
for
Change preposition
about
out
future as well. Correct your spelling
our
Above all
, contentment is the key to live
a better and happy life.Wrong verb form
living
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