Everyone of us should become a vegetarian because eating meat can cause serious health problems. To what extent do yo agree or disagree?

Healthy eating habit is one of the famous
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introduced in the past and is still being promoted nowadays. As communities continue to be more fastidious about wellness, more and more
health conscious
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individuals feel that giving up
meat
can elevate one's
health
. In
this
essay, I do not agree that everybody must become a vegetarian as adding
meat
in
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our diet can result in serious
health
problems.
Firstly
, the holistic healthy diet of human beings includes both vegetables and
meat
as these complete the food pyramid that
provide
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vitamins, minerals, and
protiens
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proteins
.
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, a meal
comprises
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of a salad and roast beef can provide vitamins
along with
protein and iron.
This
is a healthy
balance
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diet that may support people's wellness. It means that different types of food can provide different types of minerals needed for individuals to maintain their
health
.
Moreover
, vegetables can be detrimental to our body if they are not prepared properly and
this
is
also
similar in the case of pork, beef, and poultry products.
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statement
refers
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that any food can be unhealthy if it is not prepared and consumed responsibly.
For example
, if people eat contaminated
meat
they can suffer from severe stomach pain,
nausea
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and nausea
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, and may even lead to death if not treated properly. In conclusion, being vegetarian is not an assurance to become healthy and so with eating
meat
.
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