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The table below shows daily oil production in 4 countries from 2000 to 2004.

The table below shows daily oil production in 4 countries from 2000 to 2004.
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The table above depicts
oil
production
 per day in four countries between 2000 and 2004. The countries are
Nigeria
,
Chad
, Congo, and
Somalia
, all of them localized in
Africia
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Africa
.
Overall
,
Nigeria
 and Congo were the major
productors
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products
 over the 5 years,
whereas
Chad
 was in
last
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positition
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position
 in
this
 rank. There was no
oil
production
 in
Chad
 until 2002
,
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 when it increased from 8,000 to 50,000 between 2003 and 2004.
Somalia
 was the country which increased
more
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their
oil
production
 in
this
 period, growing 10 times more.
On the other hand
,
Nigeria
 faced a small
decreasing
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 until 2002, recovering their
oil
production
 in 2003 and 2004.
Chad
 presented
the
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 major
increasing
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increase
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, achieving the same amount
of
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as
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Somalia
 in 2004, but starting from zero in 2002. Congo faced the most
several
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fall
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 among
theses
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these
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coutries
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countries
, reducing their
production
 gradatively, until
got
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it reached
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 203,000 in 2004.
At the end
 of
period
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,
Nigeria
 got the first place, followed by
Somalia
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, production, nigeria, chad, somalia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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