We are becoming more and more dependent on machine to function in the modern world.To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is known that we live
technologytimes
and ı strongly believe that Correct your spelling
technology times
technology-times
people
are dependent on machines
day by. Machınes are friend
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friends
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with human
human
, we can use Fix the agreement mistake
humans
it
for our every Correct pronoun usage
them
work
as in old times and today. İn this
essay ı will explain; how machines
were replaced by people
to work
.
First,
before machines
people
had to work
by hand work
and it was too difficult because they needed too much energy. On the other hand
, machines
work
better than people
and not
need energy Add a missing verb
do not
it
used to only fuel oil or electricity. Correct pronoun usage
apply
For example
, in the old time
a lot of Add a comma
time,
people
was needed for factory work
. However
, there is need
least workers today, it is thanks to Correct article usage
a need
machines
. Some people
believe that from machines
replace people
, they find jobs very difficult. I think it is wrong because machines
help people
's jobs. That's why people
could
find Wrong verb form
can
relaxed
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a relaxed
life
, thanks to machines
.
Second,
technology
affect
countries economy, that's why they want to have strong Change the verb form
affects
technology
and machines
. İf
we look at some countries Correct your spelling
If
who
were developed Correct pronoun usage
that
according to
others, they could be successful thanks to technology
. For example
, the UK invented a steam turbine and they used it in their factory, farm
, energy and ships in short in everywhere. They won big power and money. Some Fix the agreement mistake
farms
people
believe that technology
changes our culture and they do not like technology
. according to
their opinion; it will change our life
to the bad side. however
, other people
believe that technology
friand
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friend
people
and it makes life
of Add an article
the life
people
so comfortable.
to sum up
, machines
make our life
comfortable and easier in
my opinion, Add the comma(s)
, in
machines
will work
on all people
's work
, some people
who do not like technology
will understand and begin using technology
in future. who is
do now believe Unnecessary verb
apply
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in teacnology
teacnology
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technology
they
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apply
losed
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closed
lose
everytimes
. machinies means Correct your spelling
everytime
are
power, fast, quality and free time for Unnecessary verb
apply
life
. for the
Correct your spelling
these
reasons
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reasons,
macnines
will Correct your spelling
machines
devalop
every time and we can not it stop.Correct your spelling
devalue
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