the table below give information about the underground railway system in six cities.
The chart gives information about the number of
passengers
per year (measured in millions) of Underground Railways Systems
in 6 big cities in the world, located in 2 cities in Asia, America, Correct your spelling
railway systems
Europe
continental, respectively.
It is apparent from the chart that the older the opening date, the greater the number of route Correct word choice
and Europe
length
, except Kyoto’s railway which opened in 1981 has lower Fix the agreement mistake
lengths
kilometers
of Change the spelling
kilometres
route
than Los Angeles which Add an article
the route
a route
was
opened afterwards.
Tokyo’s Subway system has the largest Unnecessary verb
apply
passengers
per year at almost 2 billion, even though Correct quantifier usage
number of passengers
their
route is just half of London’s Railway, which has the longest of railways.
Kyoto, Correct pronoun usage
its
on the other hand
, which opened 20 years before, has fewer routes than Los Angeles. However
their number of Add a comma
However,
passengers
are
similar.
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
Overall
, it can be seen from the chart that the older a railway system is, the more passengers
it serves per year.Submitted by misstiasclassroom on
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