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the table below give information about the underground railway system in six cities.

the table below give information about the underground railway system in six cities.
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The chart gives information about the number of
passengers
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 per year (measured in millions) of Underground
Railways Systems
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railway systems
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 in 6 big cities in the world, located in 2 cities in Asia, America,
Europe
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and Europe
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 continental, respectively. It is apparent from the chart that the older the opening date, the greater the number of route
length
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lengths
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, except Kyoto’s railway which opened in 1981 has lower
kilometers
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kilometres
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 of
route
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the route
a route
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 than Los Angeles which
was
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opened afterwards. Tokyo’s Subway system has the largest
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passengers
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number of passengers
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 per year at almost 2 billion, even though
their
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its
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 route is just half of London’s Railway, which has the longest of railways. Kyoto,
on the other hand
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, which opened 20 years before, has fewer routes than Los Angeles.
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However
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 their number of
passengers
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are
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is
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 similar.
Overall
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, it can be seen from the chart that the older a railway system is, the more
passengers
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 it serves per year.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words passengers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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