You want to sell your mobile phone. You think a friend of yours might like to to buy it from you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Explain why you are selling the phone Discribe the phone Suggest a mode of payment to your friend
Dear Guri,
How are you and your family ? Hope everything is fine. I heard that you are looking for a
smart phone
in the 20,000 or 30,000 range. Fortunately, I too wanted my smartphone for 25,000.
Actually, I bought Correct your spelling
smartphone
iphone
11 for 50,000 Correct your spelling
iPhone
last
year, and now I am planning to buy the new version next month. The reason why I want to purchase is the 6 inch
wide screen and the latest camera feature. I can watch high-definition videos on Add a hyphen
6-inch
six inch
screen and take tons of pictures.
My Add a hyphen
six-inch
iphone
11 is no lesser Correct your spelling
iPhone
then
Replace the word
than
other smartphone
in the market. It is still one of Change the wording
another smartphone
other smartphones
wanted
mobile phones for its processor, RAM and storage Correct article usage
the wanted
epaces
. It had no Correct your spelling
spaces
space
any
issue Correct quantifier usage
apply
of
battery drainage, stuck up or any features.
If you are interested in buying my phone just drop me a message. I will share the G pay link. So, that you can Change preposition
with
do
the online payment.
Looking forward to hearing from you.
Best wishes,
Guri DhillonVerb problem
make
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Make sure to address all the points mentioned in the prompt. You haven't mentioned why you are selling the phone.
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Organize your ideas and paragraphs in a more logical manner. The letter lacks coherence and cohesion.
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Use a wider range of vocabulary to make your letter more interesting and engaging.
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