Some people say that main environmental of our time is losing of particular species of animals and plants . Others say thet there are more important enviromental problems. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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People believe that environmental
problems
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are caused by the
loss
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of
animals
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and
trees
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while
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others disagree with that.I believe that the
loss
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of
animals
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and
trees
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is the main cause of environmental
problems
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. The imbalance of biodiversity
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due
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to losing
animals
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and plants.The cutting of
trees
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makes the environment
atmosphere
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and atmosphere
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imbalanced and
also
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affects
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weather conditions.
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, in time rain does not occur. Some people believe that the
loss
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of
animals
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and
trees
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is not the main reason for environmental
problems
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because nowadays extinction of
animals
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we still alive . There are no effects on human beings .Our lifestyles are improved more
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the advancement of technology. There are no
problems
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with losing
of
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animals
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and
trees
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.In cities , there are very less of plants but not much impact on human beings. In conclusion, I believe that there are major effects
due to
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loss
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the loss
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of
animals
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and plants.Some people agree with the statement that there is no effect
while
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others believe that there are major effects.
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