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The qualities and skills that people require to be successful in today’s world cannot be learned at university or at other academic institutions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
In order to be successful in
this
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 recent world , people should not be expected to learn
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 qualities or
skills
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 from any academic facilities. In my opinion, I can not stress how I agree with
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 statement. I believe that in order to have
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skills
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,
experiences
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 must be gained from the real world,
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 not all theories in the textbooks are practical.
Body paragraph 1
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 with, it is hard to argue that without real-life
experiences
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, everything
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 learnt in schools would be superficial. Especially for careers
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 as doctors, and engineers,... which acquire problem-solving
skills
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 to help them tackle their tasks. Obviously, problems in those books are not able to cover all the real-life situations that they will have to face in the future.
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, many fresh-graduated engineers nowadays are criticised for being lack of certain levels of practical problem-solving
skills
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 and frankly, it is not their fault, because of the fact that they are taught to cram for the exam only.
Body paragraph 2
Not only that, those who once graduated and entered working life found that theories in the textbook are not all practical,
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 studying all of that was a waste of time for them.
Although
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 some formulas would help in some careers, forcing them to learn throughout all fields is absurd.
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, there have been a number of upsetting mechanical engineers
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 that they have to take a history 101 course even though their time working in their fields has shortened.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
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 studying in academic institutions is the best way to get a dream job.
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 in order to get required
experiences
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 from those future employers, real-life learning should be considered to aid those demands. Apparently, many students find that their courses do not offer reality
experiences
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 and are pointless.

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task response
Ensure that your essay directly addresses the prompt and offers a clear stance on the issue. Your agreement with the statement is established, but it could be further emphasized by stating your position explicitly.
coherence cohesion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving
  • emotional intelligence
  • self-awareness
  • interpersonal skills
  • adaptability
  • resilience
  • networking
  • negotiation
  • time management
  • practical skills
  • real-world experience
  • academic knowledge
  • career advancement
  • foundational understanding
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