Some people claim that immigrants should adopt the local culture when immigrating to a new country. While others think that they can establish a minority community instead. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Globalization has made the world borderless and Immigration has become a popular trend in

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society. It is believed by a few Individuals that the immigrants should adapt

with

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the

culture

and traditions of the host

country

while

others believe they should maintain their own

culture

and remain as

minority

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a minority

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. In my

opinion

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opinion,

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a balance of both can be fruitful.

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essay shall discuss both views briefly and

lastly

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I shall discuss my opinion. Adopting a new

culture

can be beneficial in many

and

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ways.

Firstly

, it helps the

new comers

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to merge with

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society quickly. It is required because, without accepting the

country

culture

Immigrent

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immigrant

may not get suitable jobs to survive.

For instance

, if an emigrant from the

middle east

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immigrates to a

western

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country

and does not want to put on the appropriate attire of those countries, he may not get any jobs.

Secondly

, showing respect

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the new

country

culture

is a holy duty for the migrants. As in most cases people immigrate for better opportunities, they should

also

show respect

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the countries' existing

culture

and

tradition

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traditions

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. For example, many

european

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footballers

while

playing for

the

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football clubs

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the

middle east

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country

; put on their traditional dresses as a token of respect.

Furthermore

, it can prevent communal

clash

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In other words

, by accepting the foreign

culture

an immigrant can largely

become benefitted

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On the other hand

, many

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believe

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believes

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that

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the

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foreign migrants should stay as a

minority

in the new society, because it helps them

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preserve their own traditions and values.

This

due to

the fact that there are many religious barriers which can

be conflicting

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the new

culture

. Adopting those can be impossible for many migrants. Studies have shown that

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around 70%

muslims

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of muslims

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from different countries do not want to accept a plethora of cultures of a

christian majority

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Christian-majority

country

Moreover

, when an immigrant completely gives up his inherited

culture

, may not go back to his

country

in the future. If mine immigrants are allowed to maintain their own cultural norms, they are likely to feel more

secured

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. In my

opinion

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people should be given

with

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the freedom to choose their own

preferances

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preferences

. The idea of complete transformation is not only an inhuman thought but

also

impractical.

Conversely

formulation

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minority

groups can result in various conflicts. If

immigments

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immigrants

are given

with

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the flexibility and freedom to decide

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their own,

this

may bring the best results. In conclusion,

although

a migrant

need

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to adapt to the foreign

culture

due to

various socio-economic reasons;

however

, they shouldn't expect to live as a

minority

group. I believe, immigrants should be given

with

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the freedom and time to adapt themselves

with

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the new

countrys'

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culture

, which might be beneficial for both

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parties.

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