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-1.07.23 The graph below shows the proportion of types of magazines sold by the company in 1975, 1995 and 2015.

-1.07.23 The graph below shows the proportion of types of magazines sold by the company in 1975, 1995 and 2015.
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The chart illustrates the
figure
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 for
magazines
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 sold by a company in 1975, 1995 and 2005.
Overall
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, the proportion of sports
magazines
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 sold in 2015 took the largest part,
while
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 the percentage of fashion
magazines
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 in the same year was in the lowest
posistion
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position
.
Sport
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Sports
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magazines
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always
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are always
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 the best
sellers
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seller
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 type of
the
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apply
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company, with 30$ sold in 1975
and
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which
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 increased to 35% in 1995 and more than 40% in 2015. The
figure
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 for food
magazines
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 in 1975 was 10%,
then
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 it doubled in 1995 and
remain
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remained
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 the same percentage
with
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from
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 1975
in
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to
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 2015. In 1975, the number of fashion
magazines
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 sold was double
than
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that
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food
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of food
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magazines
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 in the same year.
However
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, the
figure
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 for fashion
magazines
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 saw a serious negative trend and reached its bottom at 5% in 2015. Looking at health
magazines
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, the
figure
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 for it in 1975 was approximately 25%.
Then
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, it dropped to 20% and remained the same
in
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for
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 the next 20 years. The proportion of the
others kind
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other kinds
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 of
magazines
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 in 1975 was equal to health
magazines
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,
then
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 in 1995m it
climb
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climbed
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 to its peak at just over 30%. After that, it
felt
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fell
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 to nearly 20% in 2015.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words figure, magazines with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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