Task 1: -1.07.23 The graph below shows the proportion of types of magazines sold by the company in 1975, 1995 and 2015.

Task 1: -1.07.23 The graph below shows the proportion of types of magazines sold by the company in 1975, 1995 and 2015.
The chart illustrates the
figure
for
magazines
sold by a company in 1975, 1995 and 2005.
Overall
, the proportion of sports
magazines
sold in 2015 took the largest part,
while
the percentage of fashion
magazines
in the same year was in the lowest
posistion
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position
.
Sport
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Sports
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magazines
always
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are always
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the best
sellers
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seller
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type of
the
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apply
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company, with 30$ sold in 1975
and
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which
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increased to 35% in 1995 and more than 40% in 2015. The
figure
for food
magazines
in 1975 was 10%,
then
it doubled in 1995 and
remain
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remained
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the same percentage
with
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from
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1975
in
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to
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2015. In 1975, the number of fashion
magazines
sold was double
than
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that
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food
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of food
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magazines
in the same year.
However
, the
figure
for fashion
magazines
saw a serious negative trend and reached its bottom at 5% in 2015. Looking at health
magazines
, the
figure
for it in 1975 was approximately 25%.
Then
, it dropped to 20% and remained the same
in
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for
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the next 20 years. The proportion of the
others kind
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other kinds
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of
magazines
in 1975 was equal to health
magazines
,
then
in 1995m it
climb
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climbed
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to its peak at just over 30%. After that, it
felt
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fell
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to nearly 20% in 2015.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words figure, magazines with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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