The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010
The first plan depicts the
road
network accessibility to a city hospital in 2007, while
the second plan illustrates it in 2010.
Overall
, it is clear that
not only the road
network efficiency improved
Wrong verb form
improve
at the end
of the study period but some new facilities constructed
around the hospital environment for the convenience of staff and referrals to the hospital.
Add a missing verb
were constructed
Tansforming
the crossroads at the two ends of the Hospital Correct your spelling
Transforming
road
in 2007 into roundabouts in 2010 in order to alleviate traffic congestions
was the most significant improvement in the communication network of that region. Fix the agreement mistake
congestion
In addition
, the bus stops in the Hospital road
were removed and a novel bus station was established on the west side of the road
.
Furthermore
, instead
of just one parking lot on the east side of the Hospital road
for both the staff and the public utilisation in 2007, another car park was constructed on the east side of the city Hospital for the
public use, Correct article usage
apply
therefore
the former one was dedicated to staff use exclusively.Submitted by golriiz23 on
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