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Do you think it is good to push students to study hard in their youth?

#students #study #youth
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, we will examine the issue from two sides. We have to think about
this
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 topic. Because
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 teenage years are very important in order to prepare for life.
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, parents should be careful when they are pushing their children. First of all, I would say yes, it is beneficial to push students to study hard in their youth. That's why, they can be ready for real life.
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,
stduying
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studying
 hard in youth builds a strong foundation for future learning.
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, they can overcome
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pressure
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 and stress. In my opinion, if young
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 learn
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 to stress, probably they will feel more comfortable when they
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pressure
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 side. Parents want to provide
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 life for their children. Young
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 have to study
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wants
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 make a
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successful
 career.
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, we should not forget that they are young and they need to spend time with other activities
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 as hobbies and
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 activities.
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, parents should be balanced as long as
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 years.
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, they can provide consult
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 for their children. There are two main elements to
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academic
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an academic
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 career for
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young
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 element is
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discipline
disciplined
, second is hard
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. If they can
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 things they can reach their target. Sometimes
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pressure
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 is beneficial
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reach
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 success. At the same time,
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is improve
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 time management skills.
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, it brings to young
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strong
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a strong
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 foundation.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • beneficial
  • academic success
  • strong foundation
  • discipline
  • time management skills
  • hard work
  • determination
  • successful career
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