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The chart below shows the amount of money given to developing countries from five organisations from 2008 to 2011.

The chart below shows the amount of money given to developing countries from five organisations from 2008 to 2011.
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The bar chart illustrates how much
money
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 was given to developing
countries
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 from 5 different organisations between 2008 and 2011.
Overall
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, what stands out from the graph is that
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 2 and
Organisation
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 3 fund developing
countries
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 more than other organisations. The amount of
money
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 spent on developing nations was rising from
Organisation
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 2 and
Organisation
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 1,
while
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 the figures for
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 4 and
Organisation
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 5 had a decline. Looking at the details, in 2008, developing nations were given around 1.3 billion
dollars
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 and 1.5 billion
dollars
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 from
Organisation
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 2 and
Organisation
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 3, which rose to 1.5 and 1.7
million
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dollars
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 respectively.
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, these figures showed an opposite trend in expenditures in 2010, with the former significantly rising to just under 2.5
million
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dollars
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,
while
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 the latter dropping to less than 1.5
million
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dollars
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.
In contrast
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, the amount of
money
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 funded by developing
countries
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 was roughly identical for
Organisation
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 1 and 4, starting at above 0.5
million
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dollars
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. The former increased to just under 1
million
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dollars
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 before declining to around 0.7
million
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dollars
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 in 2010,
while
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 the latter decreased to less than 0.5
million
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dollars
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. Despite a rise to 0.5
million
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dollars
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 in 2009, the amount
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money
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 spent declined to nearly 0.3
million
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dollars
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.
Organisation
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 5 invested in developing
countries
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 more than 1
million
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dollars
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 in 2008, which declined every year to under 0,5
million
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dollars
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 in 2011.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, countries, organisation, dollars, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international aid
  • developing countries
  • economic assistance
  • fluctuations
  • trend analysis
  • philanthropic organizations
  • non-governmental organizations (NGOs)
  • foreign aid
  • donor countries
  • recipient nations
  • financial contributions
  • economic conditions
  • fiscal policies
  • sustainable development
  • humanitarian aid
  • gross domestic product (GDP)
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