The chart below shows the amount of money given to developing countries from five organisations from 2008 to 2011.

The chart below shows the amount of money given to developing countries from five organisations from 2008 to 2011.
The bar chart illustrates how much
money
was given to developing
countries
from 5 different organisations between 2008 and 2011.
Overall
, what stands out from the graph is that
Organisation
2 and
Organisation
3 fund developing
countries
more than other organisations. The amount of
money
spent on developing nations was rising from
Organisation
2 and
Organisation
1,
while
the figures for
Organisation
4 and
Organisation
5 had a decline. Looking at the details, in 2008, developing nations were given around 1.3 billion
dollars
and 1.5 billion
dollars
from
Organisation
2 and
Organisation
3, which rose to 1.5 and 1.7
million
dollars
respectively.
However
, these figures showed an opposite trend in expenditures in 2010, with the former significantly rising to just under 2.5
million
dollars
,
while
the latter dropping to less than 1.5
million
dollars
.
In contrast
, the amount of
money
funded by developing
countries
was roughly identical for
Organisation
1 and 4, starting at above 0.5
million
dollars
. The former increased to just under 1
million
dollars
before declining to around 0.7
million
dollars
in 2010,
while
the latter decreased to less than 0.5
million
dollars
. Despite a rise to 0.5
million
dollars
in 2009, the amount
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money
spent declined to nearly 0.3
million
dollars
.
Organisation
5 invested in developing
countries
more than 1
million
dollars
in 2008, which declined every year to under 0,5
million
dollars
in 2011.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international aid
  • developing countries
  • economic assistance
  • fluctuations
  • trend analysis
  • philanthropic organizations
  • non-governmental organizations (NGOs)
  • foreign aid
  • donor countries
  • recipient nations
  • financial contributions
  • economic conditions
  • fiscal policies
  • sustainable development
  • humanitarian aid
  • gross domestic product (GDP)
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