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Task 1: The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house). The second chart show the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Task 1: The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house). The second chart show the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first
chart
 given demonstrates the percentage of 2 genders: men and women in a
a
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nation
taked
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took
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 part in cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the
house
. The second
chart
 given illustrated the amount of
time
 that
man
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men
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 and
woman
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women
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 spent on each task per day.
Overall
, we can see in the first
chart
 that
majority
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the majority
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 of
female
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females
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 keen on cooking and cleaning,
about
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the
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pet care and
house
repair
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repair,
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 will be true for the
man
. In the second
chart
, it can be seen that both
man
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men
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 and women spent almost
time
to
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cooking. In the first
chart
, females would like to
cooking
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 the most which
is account
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accounts
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 for approximately 85%,
this
also
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is also
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 true for
man
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men
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 which
just
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is just
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 lower than 25%.
House
 repairs seem to be done by
man
the
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most of the
time
 which is about 18% which contrast with
woman
 - less than 10%
compare
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 to the
man
. In the second
chart
, both females and males spent almost their
time
to
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cooking and cleaning.
However
,
house
 repairs seem to
usually
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be usually
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 done by
the
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a
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man
instead
 of
woman
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a woman
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cause
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because
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woman
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a woman
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 just spent about 5 minutes per day
for
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on
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this
 task but the amount of
time
man
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a man
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 spent was nearly 20 minutes.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, house, time, man, woman with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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