The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph compares the information of the newly opened and closed shops in a period of 8 years.
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, the figures for both categories fluctuated over an 8-year period.
While
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there were more shops
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closed most of the time, the highest point can be seen in the figure for openings. Looking at the diagram closely, during 2011-2015, one can see that
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the number in opening had
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up and down for few times, there was still a peak at around 8500 at the beginning of the period.
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, the closures experienced the lowest number about 800. For the next 4 years, the openings were relatively stable, only
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a drop
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1000. In the closures, it rose to 5000 and became steadily as well.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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