The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares the information of the newly opened and closed shops in a period of 8 years.
Overall
, the figures for both categories fluctuated over an 8-year period. Linking Words
While
there were more shops Linking Words
been
closed most of the time, the highest point can be seen in the figure for openings.
Looking at the diagram closely, during 2011-2015, one can see that Unnecessary verb
apply
while
the number in opening had Linking Words
a
up and down for few times, there was still a peak at around 8500 at the beginning of the period. Change the article
an
Also
, the closures experienced the lowest number about 800.
For the next 4 years, the openings were relatively stable, only Linking Words
saw
a drop Wrong verb form
seeing
by
1000. In the closures, it rose to 5000 and became steadily as well.Change preposition
of
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