You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Few people devote time to hobbies nowadays. Say why you think this is the case and what effect this has on the individual and society in general. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words
Thanks to the real technological revolution some
people
spend their time
entertaining. I think there are two causes and a number of damaging effects.
Firstly
, these days, because of the development of recreational facilities and video games some individuals are addicted to wasting their day on entertainment. As can be seen in all countries, particularly developed countries, there is a wide variety of developed theme parks. So, when these people
go to such
a fantastic place, they forget the time
which results in spending all of their time
. For example
, there are some people
in my family who spend their time
at their school in these places. Another cause is that rich people
have been providing this
opportunity for their children to access all sorts of facilities, and since it is affordable for them, they don’t have a tendency to find a suitable job for working. Therefore
, they can allocate all of their time
to hobbies. This
behaviour is repeated in their life, and it will be known as their customs. For instance
, the children of governors in Iran have these customs.
Secondly
, it is undeniable that it can create negative damage. First of all, this
behaviour among the people
of a country can cause a lot of problems
the important one is reducing the gross domestic product of the country because of the lack of enough individuals to work in industrial factories or in the farmlands. For example
, in my hometown, which is situated in the southwestern part of Iran, most of the elder people
are farmers, but their children have never been enthusiastic about doing such
a thing one of the reasons is because spending their time
entertain
, so they are not prepared for doing Replace the word
entertaining
this
hard work. Another effect is on those people
who are wasting time
playing video games. This
kind of popular leisure activity provides obesity, poor eyesight, and spinal-related problems
.
In conclusion, developing leisure activities and rich families are the key causes behind this
issue.The effect on people
involved economic problems
in their country and physical problems
.Submitted by rasulmaghsudi928 on
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea and supports it with relevant examples and explanations.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to using appropriate greetings and closings to maintain a formal tone in your writing.
lexical resource
Expand your vocabulary range and use more specific and varied words and phrases.
grammatical range
Work on improving your grammatical accuracy and sentence structure.
The Greeting
Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.
Always start an informal letter in the ways:
- Dear + name
- Hi / Hello + name
‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.
For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:
- Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
- Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.