The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
These pie charts illustrate the average sum of power usage in Australian
household
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households
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and emissions of the
greenhouse
gas
as a result
of used
energy
. Heating is the main reason
of
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for
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energy
usage in the residents
whereas
water heating
is holding
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holds
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the highest percentage of
greenhouse
gas
emission
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emissions
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. Cooling is the least area in both of the aspects. Here, we can see heating the water
consume
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consumes
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about 30% of
energy
and
emit
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emits
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32% of
greenhouse
gas
.
Besides
,
Heating
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the Heating
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system takes 42% of
energy
but
less
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is less
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responsible for
the
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apply
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gas
.
This
matter is
ashtonishing
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astonishing
.
In Addition
, refrigeration
is emitting
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emits
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14% of
greenhouse
gas
while
It consumes only 7% of
energy
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the energy
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in the houses.
On the other hand
, cooling, lighting and other appliances leave more
gas
compared to their
energy
consumption. The
gas
emission rate for other appliances is 28% but the rate is 15% at the time of
energy
consumption. Cooling and lighting
is
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are
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also
in the same category as they emit less
gas
than their power-using rate.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Average Australian household
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Energy consumption
  • Activities
  • Heating
  • Cooling
  • Water heating
  • Appliances
  • Lighting
  • Standby
  • Percentage (%)
  • Consumption patterns
  • Efficiency
  • Emissions impact
  • Renewable energy
  • Energy-saving measures
  • Sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Electricity
  • Natural gas
  • Emissions breakdown
  • Energy audit
  • Environmental impact
  • Conservation
  • Mitigation strategies
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