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The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017.

The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017.
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 table graph
show
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 the data of
student
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 enrolments who
study
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studied
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in
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at
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 Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017. It is clear from the graph that with the increase in the
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years
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year's
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 students was increased.
According to
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 what is shown, in 1937 the
new
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number of new
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 people
study
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students
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 enrolled was 327, after 30
years
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 the
student
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was
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rose to 1133,
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then
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and then
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 in 2017 it
was goes
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went
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 up to 6245
mumbers
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members
numbers
 in Manchester University .
Moreover
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, male and
femle
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females
has
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have
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 different percentage with change
years
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.
For example
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: women
student
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has
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had
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 45% in 1937
while
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 men had
morethan
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more than
 5% than women in
same
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the same
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years
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.
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, in 1967
male
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males
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was
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increased to 65 per cent but
female
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females
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was fell
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 to 35 per cent. After that women jumped from a 35 ratio
o
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to
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55
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a 55
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 ratio in 2017 and male students dropped
about
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by about
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 20% in 2017.
whereas
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, some students come from within 40 miles of Manchester in
first
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their first
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years
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 the numbers
around
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were around
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 55%, but in
second
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their second
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years
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 they reduced to 15% and in
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last
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the last
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years
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 they
decline
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declined
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 to 1-2%.
On the other hand
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, the
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student
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students
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comes
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apply
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from 4 countries was 6%
then
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 they climbed from 26 land about 7 rates and in 2017
was came
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came
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from102
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from
 countries almost 32 rates.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words student, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • student enrolments
  • university
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • comparison
  • trend
  • change
  • increase
  • decrease
  • fluctuation
  • significant
  • noteworthy
  • remarkable
  • notable
  • surprising
  • conclusion
  • insights
  • summary
  • overview
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