The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017.

The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017.
This
table graph
show
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the data of
student
enrolments who
study
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studied
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in
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Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017. It is clear from the graph that with the increase in the
years
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students was increased.
According to
what is shown, in 1937 the
new
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number of new
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people
study
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students
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enrolled was 327, after 30
years
the
student
was
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rose to 1133,
then
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and then
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in 2017 it
was goes
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went
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up to 6245
mumbers
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members
numbers
in Manchester University .
Moreover
, male and
femle
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females
has
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different percentage with change
years
.
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: women
student
has
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had
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45% in 1937
while
men had
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more than
5% than women in
same
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the same
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years
.
However
, in 1967
male
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males
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was
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increased to 65 per cent but
female
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females
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was fell
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to 35 per cent. After that women jumped from a 35 ratio
o
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to
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55
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a 55
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ratio in 2017 and male students dropped
about
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by about
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20% in 2017.
whereas
, some students come from within 40 miles of Manchester in
first
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years
the numbers
around
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were around
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55%, but in
second
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their second
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years
they reduced to 15% and in
last
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years
they
decline
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declined
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to 1-2%.
On the other hand
, the
student
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students
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comes
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from 4 countries was 6%
then
they climbed from 26 land about 7 rates and in 2017
was came
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from102
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from
countries almost 32 rates.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words student, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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  • noteworthy
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