In many cities, planners tend to arrange shops, schools, offices and homes in specific areas and separate them from each other. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
The
improving
of standard Replace the word
improvement
life
in many countries Use synonyms
result
Wrong verb form
resulted
to
the plan to combine Change preposition
in
to
shops, schools, offices and homes in a separate place. A lot Change preposition
apply
people
support Change preposition
of people
to
Change preposition
apply
this
strategy Linking Words
due to
their benefits Linking Words
Linking Words
while
I believe that has some negative effects Correct word choice
but
in
resident’s Change preposition
on
life
.
On the one hand, the Use synonyms
dispose
Replace the word
disposal
to
a specific area would lead to be standard Change preposition
of
life
Use synonyms
to
the Change preposition
for
resident
when they are separated Fix the agreement mistake
residents
with
the industry or supermarket. As can be seen Change preposition
from
that
they would have a good sleep standard because Correct word choice
apply
it’s
not be affected by the Verb problem
it would
noisy
of transport activities. Replace the word
noise
In addition
, Linking Words
atmosphere
is pure when having a Add an article
the atmosphere
clearly
with each area as industry activities can not affect Change the word
clear
to
homes or schools. Change preposition
apply
However
, it has positive aspects but Linking Words
also
has negative effects.
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On the other hand
, the separating of each area could move to Linking Words
other place
in order to Change the wording
another place
other places
more far
which result in Replace the words
farther
the a
lot people using increasingly transports Choose an article
the
a
such
as car, motorbike, … to serve their moving. Linking Words
Furthermore
, Linking Words
This
problem would cause pollution Linking Words
natural
habitats which is the Change preposition
of natural
most
problem in the contemporary day and it Correct word choice
biggest
also
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affect
negatively to the standard Verb problem
apply
Use synonyms
life
of residents Change preposition
of life
as
their health. Correct word choice
and
And another
Correct word choice
Another
aspects
is a mixed Replace the adjective
aspect
city
could Use synonyms
be created
Wrong verb form
create
the
connection between people Correct article usage
a
together
which is a positive part because their improvement in communication Rephrase
apply
helping
their mental health. And Wrong verb form
helps
also
help the Linking Words
city
increasingly revitalize leading to Use synonyms
attract
more Wrong verb form
attracting
the
tourist to travel.
In conclusion, Correct article usage
apply
although
the plan has many advantages, it Linking Words
also
brings more disadvantages that my opinion. Linking Words
However
, depending on the Linking Words
planing
of the leader of each Correct your spelling
planning
city
with their direction paths Use synonyms
Linking Words
thus
they could adjust to suitable Rephrase
apply
with
their strategy to develop the Change preposition
apply
city
.Use synonyms
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