It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them Iearn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

A group of people agree that
children
should be taught the
difference
between
right
and wrong
at
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early childhood using different sorts of
punishment
. At the outset, I agree with them but I must confess that
this
is not a proper way to teach something.
Parents
should use positive
reinforcements
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instead
of punishments.
Teachers
should not be allowed to punish as well. They might use different conditioning systems to teach good behaviours to
children
. It is a must for
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children
to learn the
difference
between
right
and wrong at
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early age. They should be taught positive behaviours by their
parents
and
teachers
. If they do not teach these behaviours at
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time, It will be difficult later. Though It is hard for
children
to obey all the positive rules always
but
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they should be habituated before a certain time. Sometimes,
punishment
makes
children
to
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follow the positive ways but in the long run, It is not effective. In Childhood,
children
might hear all the directions of
parents
and
teachers
for
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fear of their punishments but It will be very difficult to control them when they
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teenagers, Nowadays,
children
are very sensitive so
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physical and mental
punishment
might lead them to suicide. In Bangladesh, we witness various incidents like - a child
committed
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suicide because he felt insulted by the
punishment
of his
parents
or
teachers
.
On the other hand
, positive reinforcements or different types of conditioning, like - classical conditioning and operant conditioning can be used to teach
children
the
difference
between positive and negative behaviour.
Besides
, It will be good for the
childrens'
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mental health
although
this
technique is quite tricky. We can give here some examples of
this
effective way, like - A rewarding system using various coloured cards can be kicked off. The child who
will behave
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well,
he
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might get a green card, who
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a little wicked activity will get
blue
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a blue
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card and the most wicked one will get
red
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card for a week.
Additionally
, the
children
who will complete their
home
works
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will get an "Excellent" note from the teacher. On top of that,
who
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she
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will not complete
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, he has to join a detention class after the school hour and has to complete
home
works
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before going
home
. I think these techniques will be more helpful to teach the
children
about
right
or wrong.
Furthermore
,
parents
and
teachers
should not be allowed to punish
children
directly either physically or mentally. In conclusion, I must say that
,
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learning the
difference
between
right
and wrong is a must at
early
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age but any sort of physical or mental
punishments
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punishment
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should not be allowed. positive
techiques
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techniques
should be used
instead
.
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