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What are the advantages and disadvantages of fair trade?

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Fair
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Fairtrade
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trade
 is a system that gained
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global recognition for its ability to encourage the development of local communities and reduce environmental damage in several ways. Many fair
trade
 producers of
trade
 goods often invest their profits in their communities.
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, a coffee co-operative in Mexico utilized their earnings to establish a public bus service in their village that could
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 transportation and
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 their economic activity. Other than that, fair
trade
 helps reduce
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environmental damage by
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organic
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 farming system that
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 the soil to
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receiver
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 naturally without
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chemicals.
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, producers of organic rice in Thailand use traditional techniques that do not harm the soil and environment. In conclusion, fair
trade
 has been proven to be a positive way to develop the local community and reduction of environmental damage. By
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supporting
fair
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a fair
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trade
 system, people can play a role in promoting
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 sustainable economy.
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