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Many governments think that economic progress is the most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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When it comes to
country's
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a country's
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 development indicators, opinions differ among
people
.
While
 some
goverments
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governments
government
 hold the view that economic progress is the most
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,
i
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I
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 would agree that it is
also
 important for citizens to stimulate other
types
 of progress. On the one hand, the option to focus on
enhace
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enhance
enhanced
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the economic
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economic
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economy
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 in a
country
 is
appealling
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appealing
appalling
 for several reasons.
Economic
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The economic
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 stimulus can generate a strong
country
. The number of
unemployments
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unemployment
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 is likely to be low
,
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 if the
fanancial
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financial
 side of
this
country
 is stable.
Additionally
, economic progress
boost
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boosts
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 citizen's consumption.
This
lead
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leads
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 to
create
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creating
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 a better life where have
experiences
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experience
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 and
experiments
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experiment
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 for
people
. Another reason for
this
argurement
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argument
 is that a substantial
economic
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economy
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 would help
people
 prevent and restore their
country
 when it
have
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has
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 to deal with disasters or diseases quickly.
For example
, in
USA
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the USA
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 which
a
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is a
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wealthy
country
, the
gorverment
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government
countiniously
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continuously
 gave
support-packages
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support packages
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 for
people
 to
revovery
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recover
 their health after Covid 19.
On the other hand
,
i
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I
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 believe it
also
 would
bring
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 beneficial when a
country
develop
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develops
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 other
types
 of
progress0
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progress
such
medical
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as medicine
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 and education. Because these
types
 are root reasons for economic development.
Firstly
, the medical aspect is considered as a main role for a region.
Imagining
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 a
country
 with lots of ill and sick
people
, it would not have
employess
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employees
 or
personels
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personnel
 to work.
As a result
, creating products and services which earn money will not decrease.
Secondly
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, education is the second factor that influences in
creating
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creation
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of financial's
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financial's
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financial
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goverment
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government
. Citizen
equiped
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equipped
 with knowledge can seek for their jobs and is likely to avoid the non-job situation.
Consequences
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, they can make money and carry out their tax
responsibity
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responsibility
. In conclusion, it seems to me that economic and other
types
 of
progess
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progress
such
 as education,
medical
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and medical
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 activities can help in
country's
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a country's
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 development.
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