The bar chart below shows the number of students in three different courses from 2001-2004. Identify the main trends and summarize the data.

The bar chart below shows the number of students in three different courses from 2001-2004. Identify the main trends and summarize the data.
The bar chart shows
students
attending three different
course
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courses
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over
four
years
from 2001 to 2004. In 2001, 4.3
million
students
took
course
A.
n
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In
2002, 2.5
million
people
attended
course
A. Moving onto the year 2003, 3.5
million
people
took
course
A.
Finally
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Finally,
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in
2004
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2004,
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the
number
of
students
taking
course
A had increased to 4.5
million
students
. Moving onto
course
B
, in 2001, 2.4
million
students
took the
course
. In 2002, 4.4
million
people
attended
course
B
. In 2003, 1.8
million
people
took
course
B
. By 2004, the
number
of
students
taking
course
B
had decreased to 2.8
million
studends
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students
. Taking a look at
the
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course
C
we can see that in 2001, 2
million
students
took the
course
. In 2002, 2
million
people
attended
course
C
. In the year 2003, 3
million
people
took
course
C
. By 2004, the
number
of
students
taking
course
A had increased to 5
million
students
. If we analyze the data we can see several trends emerging.
Firstly
, the
number
of candidates taking
course
A has stayed almost the same over the
four
years
, despite declining in 2003. The
number
of candidates taking
course
B
has gradually declined over the
four
years
from 4.4
million
in 2001 to 2.8
million
in 2004.
However
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However,
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the
number
of candidates taking
course
C
has grown from 2
million
to 5
million
over the
four
years
. In conclusion
then
, one can say that over the
four year
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four-year
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period from 2001 to 2004, there has been an increase in
overall
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the overall
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numbers
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number
show examples
of
students
attending all three courses.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, course, four, years, million, people, number, b, c with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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