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Some people think the school children need to learn practical excuse such as car maintenance or bank account management along with academic subject at school. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Training practical
skills
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 is more necessary for
children
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 at school like fixing a car or financial activity in the bank, that are related to academic majors. I agree if there is correct communication between kind of
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 and
children
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's
age
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group
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. These days, some people believe that their schools should have the more practical and applicable
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 for educating the
children
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. From my point of view, if
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 kind of skill is related to the
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group
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 of
children
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, certainly, it would be more beneficial for them.
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, choose an agriculture skill as simple as its form, like growing flowers in the apartment or maintaining the trees with the right amount of water or fertilizer,
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 making
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 simple shape of desserts or food would be a specific item for under teenage
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group
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.
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, doing it would be more enjoyable for improving their responsibility in their activity.
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, when juveniles and younger
children
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 have tough fixed cars or made electronic devices, it would be a suitable selection for them. Regardless of beneficial communication between kinds of
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 and
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 groups، considering the
children
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's talent and the necessary
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 would be more effective in their lifestyle. Despite,
children
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's interest Assistant is their trainer, who considers their suitable
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 related to their talent.
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, when a student likes to make a mechanical toy, election bakery
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 would be a failure plan.
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Although
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, the schools should have an accurate plan in their timetable
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 the
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age
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likewise
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 their intelligence and interests.
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, in my opinion, educating the financial scheme is crucial for everyone in the different
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 groups with each talent. In conclusion, I agree with the alternative the practical and applicable
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 at schools by considering all aspects of it, especially,
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's
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likewise
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 their talents.
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