The chart below illustrates the result of a British survey on the types of houses people liked, taken in 2005.

The chart below illustrates the result of a British survey on the types of houses people

liked, taken in 2005.
The bar chart depicts the result of a British survey on the types of
houses
people which was in 2005.
Overall
, it is noticeable that flats in
London
had the biggest percentage,
while
detached
houses
lowest.
Furhermore
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Furthermore
, there was a negligible difference between
two
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the two
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universities
at
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in
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semi-detached
houses
.
Therefore
,
at
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apply
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flats obtained the highest percentage of people,
whereas
in
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terraced
houses
smallest
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the smallest
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throughout the period.
To begin
with flats, particularly in Cambridge they accounted for 20 %,
whereas
in Oxford under 30 % which is two times smaller than in
London
(59%). In terms of terraced
houses
, they obtained approximately
same
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proportions , namely under 20%. With regards to detached
houses
, Cambridge accounted for 35 % which is 7 times bigger than
London
( 5 %).
However
, Oxford obtained only 25 %.
Consequently
, at semi-detached
houses
Oxford and Cambridge shared similar proportions, 27 % roughly,
while
London
had approximately 14 %.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words houses, london with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • illustrates
  • result
  • British
  • types of houses
  • people
  • liked
  • taken
  • 2005
  • chart
  • popular
  • least popular
  • description
  • discussion
  • summary
  • key findings
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