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Some people think the best way to solve the traffic congestions in cities is to provide free public transports for 24 hours a day and 7 days a week. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The question of whether free public
transport
 which is available for 24 hours a day and a whole week is the foremost method to ease the
traffic
congestion
 or not has drawn much attention from the public. From my perspective, despite some negative aspects, the role of free public
transport
 is extremely important to control
traffic
congestion
. On the one hand, it is undeniable that free public
transport
 brings human society several drawbacks. The key rationale is attributed to the overcrowding. To be more precise, when public
transport
 becomes free, there is an increase in the number of
people
 who prefer to use no-fee transportation in favour of private vehicles.
As a result
, overcrowding on public
transport
 can make using it unpleasant for many or almost impossible for disabled
people
.
Additionally
, in
this
 situation, petty crimes
such
 as pickpocketing and verbal aggression can be rife on some forms of public
transport
.
On the other hand
, there are several reasons why free public
transport
 is the foremost method in order to reduce
traffic
congestion
. In fact, public
transport
 allows many
people
 to travel in just one vehicle, which helps reduce
traffic
congestion
 in city centres.
In addition
 to
this
, using public
transport
 not only reduces
traffic
congestion
,
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 but
also
 decreases the number of accidents during rush hours. To illustrate, when
people
 have a good incentive to travel by different types of public
transport
 and leave their private cars at home, inevitably, the rate of
traffic
congestion
 will be decreased owing to the fact that there are fewer accidents on the roads. In conclusion,
although
 I recognize the possible disadvantages of free public
transport
, it seems to me that it is a good approach for solving the problem of
traffic
congestion
 in the cities.
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task response
Your essay provides a clear and comprehensive response to the question. You address both the positive and negative aspects of free public transport and state your opinion clearly.
coherence cohesion
Your essay is well-structured and organized. The introduction and conclusion are clear and you have used appropriate linking words and phrases to connect your ideas.
lexical resource
Your use of vocabulary is good and you have used a variety of words and phrases to express your ideas. However, there is room for improvement in using more academic and precise vocabulary.
grammatical range
Overall, your grammar is accurate and you have demonstrated a good range of grammatical structures. However, there are a few minor errors and some sentences could be more complex.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • public transportation
  • private vehicles
  • reduce
  • encourage
  • accommodate
  • improve
  • emissions
  • sustainable
  • eco-friendly
  • cost-intensive
  • allocate
  • significant funds
  • taxes
  • public services
  • safety
  • security
  • challenge
  • overcrowding
  • inconvenience
  • prefer
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