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International sporting events are costly and bring problems to the hosting country. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give specific reasons and examples to support your position

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In
this
 era, sports
events
 play a significant role in the citizens'
life
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lives
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. International sporting
events
 give difficulties to the hosting
nation
 to plan, manage, organise and control the event in a well-organised and successful
way
. I totally agree with
this
 statement and I will discuss its reasons and examples in-depth in the subsequent paragraphs and
lastly
, I will come to a logical conclusion.
To begin
 with, in the
nation
 where international games are
conducted
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 it is the responsibility of the hosting country to organise the activity in a vibrant
way
. To elaborate, undoubtedly sporting
events
 require a lot of funds to conduct and manage
although
 huge staff and employees are hired to conduct the event in a successful
way
.
Further
 huge capital is invested
on
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 stadiums, equipment and
on
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transportation.
Hence
 it becomes complex for the hosting
nation
 to manage and conduct the international games in an accurate
way
.
furthermore
, by conducting sporting
events
 our bond with other nations rises and complexities decreases
additionally
 the hosting
nation
 should
also
 know about the
tradition
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traditions
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 and
religion
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religions
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 of the other nations.
For instance
, if any sporting program is conducted in India and neighbouring and amiably countries come to India to watch the event and few individuals
do not
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know our country's rituals, traditions and cultures can create difficulties among the residents.
Moreover
, huge crowd in the stadium or outside the stadium can cause traffic jams or serious accident and to manage
this
 efficiently huge army force, staff and police workers are required which incline the expense of the hosting
nation
 Conclusion It's the duty of the hosting
nation
 to manage the program in
the
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 vibrant and jubilant
way
 despite a lot of expenditure incurred on transportation, stadium repair, equipment and much more.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • security concerns
  • traffic congestion
  • public unrest
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