In many countries, people are living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates pronlems for governments. Other people think that there are benefits if society has more elderly people. To what extent do the advantages of having an ageing population outweigh the disadvantages?

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In today's world,
lifetime
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a lifetime
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of
people
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is getting longer and
ageing
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the ageing
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poulation
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population
are
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is
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incresing
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increasing
. Some
of
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the
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apply
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people
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believe that
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the growing
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elderly
popoulation
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population
lead
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leads
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some
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problems for
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apply
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governments
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while
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others are of the opinion that
ageing
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the ageing
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population
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has
benefits
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in some aspects.
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essay will discuss both advantages and drawbacks
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of having
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an aging
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aging
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ageing
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population
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. From the point of
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view,
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people
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believe
ageing
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the ageing
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population
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creates
pronlems
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problems
for
government
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the government
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,
it is clear that
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one of the main
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reasons
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of
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this
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problem is decreasing workforce.
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, especially for the physical
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work
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there is a decline and these
governments
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are looking for workers from
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another country
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countries
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and
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situation creates extra costs and legal issues.
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to that,
governments
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with
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an aging
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aging
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ageing
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population
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must ensure good healthcare
ans
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and
insurance system since elderly
people
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starts
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to use
healthcare
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the healthcare
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system more often and
also
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this
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case creates costs for
governments
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.
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, having an ageing
population
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have
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has
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some
benefits
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on
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for
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society.
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, raising a child with grandparents, not with babysitters, strengthened their family bonds and these children
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can easily learn traditional things from their grandparents. Not only
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, in today's world having more elderly
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is a sign for developed
countries
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. It means that
government
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the government
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ensure
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wealth and
economical
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stability, so these
people
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don't have to leave their country and they
grow
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raise
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their children
in
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to
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good standards.
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, it shows the migration rate is low. In third-world, developing
countries
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migration rate is
evry
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very
high and
people
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try to
grow
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raise
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more
child
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children
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in
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with
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bad standards. Since educated
people
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are
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have
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started to move
developed
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to developed
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countries
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their ageing
population
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is very low. In conclusion, having an elderly
population
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both
have
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has
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benefits
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and drawbacks, but if all of the positive and negative sides are concerned, I would personally argue that
,
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apply
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having an aging
population
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is a good sign for
countries
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development status and
also
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have
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has
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many
benefits
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while
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raising children.
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