More and more countries are making University education completely free for their citizens. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

Countries are making academic
education
free of charge
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an increasing rate.
While
there are numerous benefits to it, I strongly believe we shouldn't ignore the drawbacks. On one hand, free academic
education
is beneficiary in many aspects.
For instance
, many skilled students with high potential fail at attending college
due to
lack
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of financial resources. Making
this
possible, helps many people to see their dreams come true and be able to study in their
favorite
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major.
In addition
, graduated students won't have to worry about their huge college loans, and they can spend their early earnings on building their
career
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.
On the other hand
, if governments make universities cheap or free, lower budgets will be spent on
education
.
This
means the total money
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on advanced
education
will be much
lesser
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.
Furthermore
, the
overall
quality of
education
will reduce and we will face its outcomes in the following years.
For example
, various occupations like doctors and engineers, depend highly on the information taught in college. With
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weak training, people's lives will be at risk. In conclusion, making it easy to achieve
high level
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educations
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by reducing study costs, is a positive thing,
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we can't simply ignore the fact that
this
might have complications in the future.
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