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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
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The pie charts compare the populace of Yemen and Italy
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based
 on their
age
, which is divided into three different categories in 2000, with
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anticipation for 50
years
 later. In Yemen, most of the
population
 in 2000 was people from 0-14
years
 of
age
 at about 50%, followed by 15-59
years
 old at just about 4% less than the previous group, with the smallest group who are elderlies over 60
years
 old at only 3.6
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.
However
, it is expected that 15-59
years
 of
age
 be the
most
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population
 in 2050 at close to 60% of people. Similar to before, in 2050, it is predicted that senior citizens will be the least number of
population
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.
By contrast
, in
Italy
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Italy,
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 most of the society in 2000 was people
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15-59
years
 of
age
 and the second most
population
 was over 60s at 61.6% and 24.1%, respectively.
Youngesters
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Youngsters
,
however
, formed the smallest society
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this
 year. Fifty
years
 later,
middle-aged
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 group will fall in number and is expected to be 46.2% of the community but elderlies is predicted to increase sharply to 42.3%.
Younger
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 generation still is expected to be the smallest
population
 at 11.5%.
Overall
, the diagrams suggest that in both Yemen and
Italy
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 the
population
 will
becom
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become
 older in the future.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, years, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age demographics
  • age structure
  • population distribution
  • youthful population
  • ageing population
  • life expectancy
  • birth rate
  • demographic shift
  • population projection
  • median age
  • dependents
  • working-age population
  • elderly dependents
  • geriatric
  • fertility rate
  • migration
  • demographic trends
  • baby boomers
  • demographic dividend
  • population pyramid
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