The number of ooverweight children in developed countries is increasing. Some people this is due to problems such as the growing number of fast food outlets. Others believe that parents are to blame for not looking after their children's health. To what extent do you agree with these views?
The rapid increase in overweight children in a country like Sri Lanka can be seen
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reasons
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fast moving
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fast-moving
food
outlets and careless Use synonyms
parents
who do not give attention to their kin's Use synonyms
health
. In my opinion, there could be other Use synonyms
reasons
as well. But I would agree Use synonyms
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with
mentioned
two Correct article usage
the mentioned
reasons
since they are the main causes.
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, when compared to the past years, the size of kids Linking Words
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food
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these
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health
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Secondly
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to
their children's Change preposition
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health
. Nowadays some elders are Use synonyms
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more skuggish
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than
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and forming campaigns to make Fix the agreement mistake
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apply
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unhealthy Change preposition
of
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health
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healty
cuisines.
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overweight
problem is rapidly increasing around the world. Mostly in developing countries. From my perspective, Replace the word
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expansion
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