Today, many people do not know their neighbours in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

In the modern
ages
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, many
people
do not know who
are
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live
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next to them in
largest
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the largest
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cities because
people
work
very bury and
this
essay will give the solution that spending more
times
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time
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for
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on
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their
life
. There are many problems that
people
argue that
people
are
work
-hard to
work
every day. Many
family
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families
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have many activities that they
nork
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work
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and do
such
as
do
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housework or
work
to raise money.
People
's
life
is an example,
people
get up early to
prepair
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prepare
their
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for their
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work
and their family like
make
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breakfast or
ride
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their children to school and after
the
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apply
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work
, they will go home and spend more
times
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time
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for
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with
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family. So it is difficult for many
people
to meet their
neighbours
. They
work
different
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at different
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times
and
come
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coming
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cross
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across
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to meet neighbourhoods outside the house to say "hello" is difficult. If many
family
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families
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had
times
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time
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, they would gather their
neighbours
in the residence area.
However
, a solution can be found in
people
's
life
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lives
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when they can
be arranged
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arrange
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their
times
. They need to spend more
times
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time
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for
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on
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their
life
and have
times
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time
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to relax or gather with their
neighbours
to reduce stress in their
work
.
People
will be helped by
the
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their
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neighbours
when they have difficult problems in their house.
For instance
,
people
hang out for their
work
and the
neighbours
can
be protected
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protect
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their
house
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houses
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when
have
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there are
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a problems
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problems
a problem
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such
as household fires or
the
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apply
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robbers
steal
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stealing
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.
As a result
,
people
need to prepare suitable
times
to
work
and their
life
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lives
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. Many
family
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families
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should
be spent
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spend
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more
times
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time
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for
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with
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their
neighbours
to have more relatives. In conclusion, many
people
need to communicate with their
neighbours
that
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to
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making
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make
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the
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a
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better
life
.
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  • Isolation
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  • Vulnerability
  • Support networks
  • Local gatherings
  • Foster
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  • Emergency situations
  • Natural disasters
  • Shared resources
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