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The graph below shows unemployment levels in Ireland and the number of people leaving the country between 1988 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows unemployment levels in Ireland and the number of people leaving the country between 1988 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart above illustrates the levels of
unemployment
 and the
number
 of
people
 that
leaving
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 a country in the period from 1988 to 2008.
This
 country is Ireland.
Overall
,
unemployment
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 rate was about 17% in 1988, decreased
until
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 about 5% in 2000, achieving about 10% in 2008.
On the other hand
, the
number
 of
people
 leaving
Iralnd
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Ireland
 started at 40,000 in 1998, increased to almost 70,000 in 1990,
then
 depicted a
decreasing
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 and after reached a plateau from
1990s
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the 1990s
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 to 2004, when there was a new
increasing
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, achieved 45,000
people
 in 2008. It is possible to identify a correlation between
unemployment
 and migration. Generally, when
the
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unemployment
 falls, the
number
 of Irish
people
 leaving the country falls
also
. When
the
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apply
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unemployment
 grows, the
number
 of
people
 leaving Ireland is bigger. Analyzing these 20 years, from 1988 to 2008, it is possible to affirm that the amount of emigrants from Ireland
was
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has
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 not changed a lot,
however
, the
unemployment
 rate presented an improvement.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "falls" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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