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The pursuit of wealth has become the main motivation for many business owners nowadays. Do you think this is is a positive or negative development?

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Each
company
 has its own targets from the
establish
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 date. Determining the main motivation is very important because it has a huge effect on the
company
's path.
However
, it is considered a negative development if the main operation of a
company
 is pursuing
the
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wealth.
Firstly
, if
the
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wealth is the main point, the owner can ignore the societal benefits, they only concentrate on their career and ignore others.
For example
, the owners will
try
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 raise their profit by operating the business under the law,
that
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which
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 can impact
on
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the labourers
,
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 or tax authorities.
Secondly
,
this
 main motivation can destroy our environment. Because they are only focusing on making money, they do not care
the
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about the
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 people or
habitat
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habitats
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around
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around them
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.
For example
, they are always ready to
destruct
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 an
eco-system
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ecosystem
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such
 as a mountain, a lake, and so on to construct a resort.
Finally
,
this
 purpose can lead to a
segement
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segment
 position. Because the owners only focus on their own,
therefore
, they are going to ignore everything and everyone.
Accordingly
, they can give any other support or empathy, that can lead them to an isolated position when they need others's help. In conclusion, there are a number of adverse effects if the pursuit of wealth has become the main motivation for many business owners
such
 as the
company
's path, decrease
the
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 quality of
environment
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the environment
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 and the support sources.
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