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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.
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The given bar chart illustrates comparative information about the
number
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 of families’ yearly
income
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 in the United States of America in 2007, 2011 and 2015.
Overall
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, what stands out from the graph is that the most US household annual
income
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 in three
years
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 was $100,000 or more,
whereas
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 the lowest
number
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 of Americans gained between $75,000 - $99,999 in all three mentioned
years
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.
However
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, the
number
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 of
people
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 who acquired
income
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 between $50,000-$74,999 remained constant. As
it
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is presented
on
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in
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diagram
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, in 2007 the
number
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 of
people
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 whose annual
income
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 varies between $100,000 or more started
with
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at
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 just under 30
million
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. Having slightly decreased in 2011 to around 27
million
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, in 2015 it reached a peak at just under 35
million
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, becoming
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number
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the number
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 one annual
income
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. With respect to the
number
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 of households whose yearly earnings differ between $75,000 - $99,999, it started at just under 15
million
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 in 2007
,
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 and slightly declined in 2011.
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, in 2015 it stood at 15
million
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.
According to
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 the bar chart, the
number
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 of
people
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 whose yearly
income
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 is less than $25,000 was 25
million
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 in 2007. After 4
years
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 it witnessed a considerable increase and was just under
than
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30
million
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, becoming the most common annual
income
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. In 2015 it decreased minimally and stood at around 27
million
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. With regards to the
number
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 of
people
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 whose annual earnings vary between $25,000 - $49,999, it began at just above 25
million
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 in 2007. Having remarkably
grew
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grown
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 in 2011 to around 30
million
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, it experienced a
slightly
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slight
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 decrease in 2015,
stood
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standing
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 at around 27
million
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.
Whereas
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 the
number
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 of
people
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 who earned
income
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 between $50,000 - $74,999 remained unchanged at 20
million
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 in all mentioned three
years
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, whereas".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, income, years, people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic landscape
  • Household income
  • Economic health
  • Income brackets
  • Trends
  • Inflation
  • Unemployment rates
  • Job market
  • Income disparity
  • Housing affordability
  • Access to education
  • Quality of life
  • Economic policies
  • Income inequality
  • Mitigating
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