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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the developments which took place in the floor plan of Central
Library
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 over 20
years
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.
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, a comparison of the two maps reveals a change from a limited establishment to a mainly well-fixed
library
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. The
library
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 had fewer opportunities in the past, but during the 20
years
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, the
library
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 experienced a number of changes. The most noticeable is that tables and chairs for the visitors in the
center
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removed
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were removed
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 and now
this
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 place is empty. The construction of the 4 sections did not alter, but their genres and techniques changed considerably.
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, children’s
books
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 and CDs, videos,
computer
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and computer
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 games on the north side of the
library
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deleted
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were deleted
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 and replaced by
lecture
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a lecture
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 room, children’s fiction
books
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, and storytelling events with two sofas. After twenty
years
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, the entrance of the
library
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 remained,
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 on the south side, a reading room and an enquiry desk were cleared to make way for a computer room and cafe.
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, adult fiction
books
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, which are located
in
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on
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 the left of
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library
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the library
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,
moved
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are moved
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 to
right
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the right
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 side where self-service machines.
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, all reference
books
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 emerged in the
west
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West
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 after twenty 
years
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, years, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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