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Some people believe that social netwroking sites have a great negative affect on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

#people #sites #individuals #society
People
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about
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 the damaging
affect
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effects
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 of Social networking sites on both
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individuals and
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society
 as a whole. In my perspective, I completely agree with the above statement, I believe the negative side of social media can not be overlooked, It has made
individual
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 alien to reality, and more often than not makes them doubt their position in
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society
. Nowadays, all of us lead two social lives, one of which is Virtual and the other Real. It is the very nature or inherent behaviour of humans to interact with other humans in
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order
 to survive.
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 the problem
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,
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 when we deep dive into our Virtual life but leave our real one behind. The consequence of
this
 is that creates a dissonance in our life, we
loose
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 our natural balance, we
foresake
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forsake
 our environment and the setting and have no knowledge of what’s happening around us. At times, individuals ,
such
 as professional gamers, who spend
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 majority of their time, meeting
people
 online, find it hard to form a real connection in their physical life, as they mostly have forgotten the world that exists outside their screens.
Although
, meeting
people
 and socializing online does have some positive attributes, the negative side outweighs the positive. All of us as human
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beings
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 to know our position in
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society
, in order to function well and contribute back to
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society
. Knowing your place in
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society
 requires practice and engagement , both of which cannot be achieved if
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 blocked
infront
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in front
 of your screen. It is only through meeting new
people
,
you
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 will expand your
horizon
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horizons
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,
learn
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and learn
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 about new
culture
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cultures
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,
language
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, skills etc which in the real world space feels more authentic and truthful.
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task response
Make sure to clearly state your position in the introduction and provide a balanced argument in the body paragraphs. Additionally, include more supporting examples to strengthen your ideas.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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